Zarah Mei's First Thanksgiving
small revision:First Thanksgiving With Zarah MeiZarah Mei had yam todayor maybe it was yesterday...What matters is that it was dinnerand the yam outsidewent happily in her,joined the chickenwhich was...
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second mother?earns a prize for the most off beat poem of the month.bernie
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Zarah Mei had yam today or maybe it was yesterday... What matters is that it was dinner and the yam outside went happily in her, joined the chicken which was roasted, while the candle brightly toasted...
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What a fun read. The poem is different and I like it. Many different twists and turnsand many different images. That ending, I said to myself outloud and brighthad touched her glorious crown.now to...
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Alison,In the joint family system we call all our uncles ‘father.’ So it is that a little boy quipped,’’One father has gone to Ahmedabad, another to Pondicherry, and my actual father is also not in...
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Love it, Alison, just the way it is, perfect and with so much charm. johanna
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thanks for reading, Bernie, Kathleen, Siva, I still find it a little clunky in moments...but not sure how to improve it. Bernie, my sister is Zarah Mei's adoptive mother. ( I often think of her China...
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thanks, Johanna! It's a few years old now, but i always thought it needed something more, or less. Maybe just "First Thanksgiving" "second" also throws the meter off, but then, maybe there's some...
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What's clunky? I see no clunk. Including in the title. But if you are not happy with it, maybe just Zarah Mei's Thanksgiving. If read with enough attention to detail, there is a clue to tell us her...
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Hi Alison, as usual very creative and very Alison. I have no problems with second mother, but did wonder about roast chicken for Thanksgiving. How about= and the yam outside went happily in her,...
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Hi Johanna, my feeling was the "first thanksgiving" might give a reader the idea that it is a new world for her. a new tradition... the repetition of her name in the title might be tiresome or cutesy?...
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So very sweet. This poem reminds us of all we take for granted. It's beautiful.
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look....this poem assumes starving children in China. the old cliche.Internet comment:If there is one thing that can be said about the American diet, it is that we are severely undernourished when it...
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ook.... this poem assumes starving children in China. the old cliche. Internet comment: If there is one thing that can be said about the American diet, it is that we are severely undernourished when...
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Osal---do you remember what your mother might have said, 30 years ago:better eat that, remember the starving children in China. this child is how old? but certainly born long after the great famines...
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O i love the direction your poetry has taken with this poem and your ibpc poem...i am picturing illustrations to match. you have a lyrical sense and this one doesn't fail on reading outloud enjoyed
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Bernie, this is not a poem about food. I'm sorry you insist on seeing it as some evidence of force-feeding, but I appreciate it irks you, or triggers something... It was a very happy day for ZM, and...
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PS, "what matters is that it was dinner" hmm. Might be a red herring. That was meant playfully, as in, it matters quite a bit to my sister, who's a Taurus, hence, earthy, and enjoys a celebration...
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O---yes a good way to put it, it hit a nerve.let me think more deeply about your question, in the meantime, speaking of Africa----Ballroom Dancers Of Darfur They walk out of magazines and radio...
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What a charming poem. Having not read any of the other comments--I try to read a poem with a fresh mind and eyes the first time through and offer comments before reading anyone else's--I'm guessing...
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How nice to see you here! ( and now I look forward to reading a new poem from you) Thank you so much for your comments. I must admit, I was a bit disheartened to feel that the poem might not have...
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